雅思写作中,经常出现的2种多余冗长结构!
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雅思写作中,无论是雅思考生、雅思老师甚至是一些英语母语的不常常用英文写作的人都会犯语言冗长多余的错误。而这样的错误往往不仅仅是意群和概念上的,而纯粹是结构、用词上的(想想之前川普在网上被批得体无完肤的段落)。

我们中国的雅思考生在写雅思作文的时候很多情况下是把中文的句子和结构直接翻译成英文,这就造成冗长多余现象多处多次出现,极大影响了语法结构和文章整体性的评分。

Almost every text that has been translated into English from Chinese, (or that has been written directly in English by a native speaker of Chinese) contains unnecessary words. Draft translations are commonly full of them, and even polished final versions are seldom free of them.

大名鼎鼎的Trumpish(川普式英语)是啥样的?除了傻瓜式的spelling mistakes之外,川普也会常常犯grammar mistakes,比如以下这条:

批注:Something either is forthcoming or is not. "Will be forthcoming" is redundant(冗余的).

forthcoming意思是“即将到来的”,本身就带有未来的意思。搭配正确的be动词应该是一般现在时。

一、第一等级的多余
在词语中已经包含的意思被重复再写

There have been good harvests in agriculture.

→ in agriculture是多余的

Living standards for people in both urban and rural areas continued to rise.

→ for people是多余的

The development of our economy in the future will, to a large extent, depend on the younger generation.

→ in the future是多余的

The government should adopt a series of measures to ensure that...

→ a series of是多余的


二、第二等级的多余
运用了中国老师教的中式结构,句子不简洁

It is impossible for us to accomplish the transformation of the whole society overnight.

→ It is impossible for us to transform the whole society overnight.

They should conduct a careful examination of…

→ They should carefully examine…

Approval should be given to such projects.

→ Such projects should be approved.

This measure will have a restrictive effect on the activities of speculators.

→ This measure will restrict the activities of speculators.

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